Please what do you think of my writing style ?

First off, make certain that you capitalize your I's, and put your punctuation next to the word. Also, "My mother Halima and Nahar" that was confusing. At first I thought you meant "My mothers Halima and Nahar" but then you go on to say Nahar is male. Might want to fix that so it's not so confusing, okay? I'm not quite sure how I feel about your story, it's so all over the place. It also seems like such a long rant, reminds me of something I might find in the 'Family & Relationships' section.